[One-shot] Naruto: Sand Speak
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inkcanvasFandom: Naruto
Characters: Gaara/Sakura (subtle)
Rating/Status: G / 500 words, complete
Timeline: Post time-skip, likely right after the Gaara-rescue mission
Summary: Actions speak louder than words. Or in Gaara's case, sand speaks the loudest.
Author's Note: The last paragraph of this fic was actually written on a scrap piece of paper almost a year ago. I accidentally found the paper earlier today, hence the birth of this ficlet. I'll warn you now that the style is littered with tons of run-on (and probably grammatically incorrect) sentences. It's also angst-free, nothing deep, and with a likelihood of OOC. :D Written very quickly, without much editing, but all in good fun. It is, however, the first Gaara/Sakura anything that I've ever shared with the public though. Can't help feeling a little nervous about that.
Sand Speak
Heat was beating down on her neck, there's sand everywhere, Naruto was being much too loud, and Haruno Sakura was getting really annoyed. The desert, she thought, had a serious way of grating on her nerves, mission successfully completed or not. Well, that or it could just be the blisters forming at the soles of her feet from the sand that wouldn't stop collecting inside of her shoes.
Wiping the sweat off her forehead with the back of her hand for the hundredth time, Sakura had half the mind to start stomping her foot childishly, if only to release some of her irritation. Instead, she reached down, also for the hundredth time, to pry at the base of her sandals so that she could attempt to shake at least some of the sand out yet again.
Hopping on one foot to keep moving, she eyed the boy walking calmly just a little ahead of her, to the left and with gourd missing. Well, there's one who's in his own element.
I bet his sandals are sand-free, the bastard.
With an aggravated huff, Sakura, still hopping, switched her sand-removing efforts to the other foot as she narrowed her eyes at the mop of red hair and the pale skin that looked suspiciously absent of sweat. She wondered if he'd take it in a horribly bad way if she asked him to command the damned sand away from her feet.
And then he turned around, not completely but just enough for one of his eyes to focus in on her without warning. Sakura froze instantly, mid-hop, with one foot in the air and three fingers lodged between toes inside her sandals... and all thoughts of inappropriate favor-asking was just simply gone. Vaguely, she was aware of how this wasn't quite the position she wanted to be caught in. But then he was staring, eyes roaming down to her feet and back up to her burning cheeks, and Sakura did the only thing her embarrassed brain knew how to do at the moment. She stared back, which lasted about four seconds before...
"Saaaaakura-chan! What're you doing?"
"Ooohh! Such power of youth! Sakura-san must be training by crossing the desert on one foot!"
And even that was all just fine, until Naruto, in his full idiotic glory, slapped her a little too hard on the back in greeting as he jogged up to her. By the time Sakura clambered back onto her feet, punched Naruto to some far off distance, and remembered what she was doing before her face was buried in sand, he had already gone back to walking in that infuriatingly impassive manner of his. Casting one final glance in his direction, she violently swatted some sand off her arm and grumpily plowed forward once more.
About seven steps later, though, Sakura found that she had sand in her hair, under her nails, on her face, and even between her chest bindings... but her feet and sandals, now those were curiously and blissfully sand-free for the rest of the journey.
/End
Thank you for reading, and as always, comments and concrit are very much appreciated. :)
Characters: Gaara/Sakura (subtle)
Rating/Status: G / 500 words, complete
Timeline: Post time-skip, likely right after the Gaara-rescue mission
Summary: Actions speak louder than words. Or in Gaara's case, sand speaks the loudest.
Author's Note: The last paragraph of this fic was actually written on a scrap piece of paper almost a year ago. I accidentally found the paper earlier today, hence the birth of this ficlet. I'll warn you now that the style is littered with tons of run-on (and probably grammatically incorrect) sentences. It's also angst-free, nothing deep, and with a likelihood of OOC. :D Written very quickly, without much editing, but all in good fun. It is, however, the first Gaara/Sakura anything that I've ever shared with the public though. Can't help feeling a little nervous about that.
Heat was beating down on her neck, there's sand everywhere, Naruto was being much too loud, and Haruno Sakura was getting really annoyed. The desert, she thought, had a serious way of grating on her nerves, mission successfully completed or not. Well, that or it could just be the blisters forming at the soles of her feet from the sand that wouldn't stop collecting inside of her shoes.
Wiping the sweat off her forehead with the back of her hand for the hundredth time, Sakura had half the mind to start stomping her foot childishly, if only to release some of her irritation. Instead, she reached down, also for the hundredth time, to pry at the base of her sandals so that she could attempt to shake at least some of the sand out yet again.
Hopping on one foot to keep moving, she eyed the boy walking calmly just a little ahead of her, to the left and with gourd missing. Well, there's one who's in his own element.
I bet his sandals are sand-free, the bastard.
With an aggravated huff, Sakura, still hopping, switched her sand-removing efforts to the other foot as she narrowed her eyes at the mop of red hair and the pale skin that looked suspiciously absent of sweat. She wondered if he'd take it in a horribly bad way if she asked him to command the damned sand away from her feet.
And then he turned around, not completely but just enough for one of his eyes to focus in on her without warning. Sakura froze instantly, mid-hop, with one foot in the air and three fingers lodged between toes inside her sandals... and all thoughts of inappropriate favor-asking was just simply gone. Vaguely, she was aware of how this wasn't quite the position she wanted to be caught in. But then he was staring, eyes roaming down to her feet and back up to her burning cheeks, and Sakura did the only thing her embarrassed brain knew how to do at the moment. She stared back, which lasted about four seconds before...
"Saaaaakura-chan! What're you doing?"
"Ooohh! Such power of youth! Sakura-san must be training by crossing the desert on one foot!"
And even that was all just fine, until Naruto, in his full idiotic glory, slapped her a little too hard on the back in greeting as he jogged up to her. By the time Sakura clambered back onto her feet, punched Naruto to some far off distance, and remembered what she was doing before her face was buried in sand, he had already gone back to walking in that infuriatingly impassive manner of his. Casting one final glance in his direction, she violently swatted some sand off her arm and grumpily plowed forward once more.
About seven steps later, though, Sakura found that she had sand in her hair, under her nails, on her face, and even between her chest bindings... but her feet and sandals, now those were curiously and blissfully sand-free for the rest of the journey.
/End
Thank you for reading, and as always, comments and concrit are very much appreciated. :)
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Date: April 7th, 2007 07:53 pm (UTC)Very nice. Short and lovely. Just what I needed today. :D
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Date: April 7th, 2007 08:15 pm (UTC)Btw, you icon cracked me up. xD
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Date: April 7th, 2007 08:22 pm (UTC)Lee always makes me laugh no matter what! "The Power of Youth!" right on lol!
... yeah
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Date: April 8th, 2007 01:12 am (UTC)Thank you for commenting on the fic! :3
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Date: April 7th, 2007 08:29 pm (UTC)Too cute. :)
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Date: April 8th, 2007 01:15 am (UTC)Thank you so much! :)
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Date: April 7th, 2007 09:37 pm (UTC)You were definitely right about the run-on sentences, though. ~_^
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Date: April 8th, 2007 01:27 am (UTC)Thank you very much for the compliments! I'm so glad you liked the ending, since the entire fic relied on and centered around that last sentence- it would've gone absolutely nowhere without it. :\
Btw, I found it quite interesting that you're the only one who thought it was Gai (as opposed to Lee) talking. It truly can be either one I guess. ^_^
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Date: April 8th, 2007 01:55 am (UTC)It's interesting how these little flashfics tend to hinge on either the opening or closing line (and sometimes both.)
I can be either one and oddly I didn't even think of Lee even though I know he was on that mission. It may have been that I just finished reading something else that had more Gai in it than Lee - or maybe I equate Gai with more obliviousness than Lee. *Shrugs* Either works and either is funny.
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Date: April 8th, 2007 02:44 am (UTC)Okay it's official. I really REALLY like you now. XD
♥♥♥
Seriously, I like it! I like how subtle your GaaSaku is. They're so in character here. ;)
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Date: April 12th, 2007 12:13 pm (UTC)And thank you! Subtle is probably why I had the courage to post this though- all the other ones I have sitting in my computer, I keep feeling like everyone's too OOC. =_=
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Date: April 12th, 2007 01:14 pm (UTC)Oh oh do post it! If it's written by you I'm SURE it's still great, whatever you may think of it. And just for the record, I'd love to read the rest of your fics. ;)
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Date: April 13th, 2007 06:08 pm (UTC)Ah, you have too much faith in my writing. ^^; A lot of my GaaSaku are just clips that's supposed to go into a chaptered fic, but I haven't completely fleshed out the chapters because I don't have much confidence in making the pairing work. Believe it or not, I've been mulling over them for a year now. -_-
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Date: April 15th, 2007 12:18 pm (UTC)I guess that's what happens when girls are lacking in a series. :p
Yes, that's so right! LOL!
Making the pairing work... Hmm... I guess once you start on a fic it'll work out eventually. But I do understand where you're coming from. I've started this NejiSaku fic a long time ago, thinking that I'll be able to pull it off. Uhmm... but I've abandoned it now coz I don't think the plot will work. ^^; I don't mean to discourage you though! By all means, please do continue GaaSaku! :D
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Date: April 16th, 2007 09:01 am (UTC)Ooh, I didn't know you wrote a Neji/Saku- did you publish it online or did you only write it privately? Either way, don't you hate it when you have a great idea for a fic, and then it just somehow doesn't want to work out? T_T I'll probably continue to fiddle with my GaaSaku, if only just because it won't leave my head alone! I keep having flashes of moments that's supposed to go into the fic. :p Perhaps I should try to find a beta or someone to talk to the fic about. Hmm.
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Date: April 16th, 2007 01:52 pm (UTC)Duty before Honor:
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2923653/1/
don't you hate it when you have a great idea for a fic, and then it just somehow doesn't want to work out?
YES! That's what happened to my NejiSaku. Yes, I actually got it out in my ff.net account. I had it done up to 2 chapters only. LOL! ^_^; At first I really thought I could pull it off. I mean, it's not that a very unique plot and if you think about it, it's quite easy for NejiSaku to happen in it. But... it's got a lot more complicated than I imagined. When I was writing the 3rd chapter, I was thinking that it really wasn't working. :(
Perhaps I should try to find a beta or someone to talk to the fic about. Hmm.
Yes you should! Hehehe! This fandom needs more GaaSaku love! XD
aack!
Date: April 16th, 2007 02:04 pm (UTC)A Lesson in Chemistry:
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3026289/1/
Fated:
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2144296/1/
The Nature of the Game:
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/1946811/1/
A bit of warning... Those three are dramatic and full of angst. ^^;
Hindsight's 20/20:
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/1862739/1/
This one's AU and more of Sakura-centric. But it has mixes of KakaSaku and ItaSaku.
Glass Castle:
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/1879007/1/
Sandly, that one's on hiatus. =/
To Mend this Dream:
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/1796093/1/
The Butterfly:
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/1825522/1/
The last one's a house of angst, but well-written fic nonetheless.
There. I hope you enjoy. ^_^;
And sorry about that. I hit the submit button a little too early. ^^;
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Date: April 14th, 2007 01:12 am (UTC)It's nice when the numbers work out that way, huh? XD Anyway, good flow, good focus on feeling and placement.
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Date: April 14th, 2007 01:23 pm (UTC)And yep! That's always a nice bonus. :D Anyhow, thank you- I'm just glad the first GaaSaku fic worked out okay after all.
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Date: April 11th, 2007 06:16 am (UTC)xD
Gaara has a heart, he just shows it differently.
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