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[Fic Notes] Pictures on the Wall - Ch.1
Perhaps it's because Pictures on the Wall is a story I've never had anyone to really talk to about, I'm always fretting over it - monstrous thing of doom that it is. That's a decade of fretting, I just realized. :P But I have lots of thoughts about the fic, because, well, it's rather impossible not have any for a story I spent so many years mulling over.
That said, I've decided to go ahead and begin re-posting revisions for the story. More than anything, this is to prevent me from editing the revisions any further. It was my original intention to get at least half the story revised before I begin posting, but I'm beginning to realize that I'll never stop fiddling with them if I don't put it out for the public - and I've been fiddling for years. Yes, years. And the versions only got worse, not better. Enough is enough, me thinks. ._.
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Regarding the revisions:
If, by any chance, an old reader is still around, I'd like to clarify a few things about the revisions. The storyline is still the same. What has changed in the revision will fall in the beginning chapters more than anywhere else - specifically the first 5 chapters (I'm approximating here).
The important parts are still the same, but what I've done is move some scenes around and inserted a couple new ones to expand the initial interactions between Nao and Isao/F4 a little - sometimes for the purpose of speeding things up, other times to further build their characters and relationships or make things a bit more interesting.
For example, instead of having them first meet during English class in chapter 2, I've moved it over to the first chapter and also added an extra scene where they actually encountered each other in the beginning under false impressions. The first few chapters will be the ones most prone to having these additions/edits done. Everything afterwards should remain largely the same.
Other than the grounds, the café, the hallways and various classrooms, Kamio-sensei had never really gone into much detail regarding what Eitoku's curriculum or campus is like (not that I know of anyway), so I've taken liberties to play around a little and hopefully still stay within reason in terms of Japanese school systems.
The campus:
So… Eitoku's campus, the way I've pictured it, goes something like this. It's an escalator school, as we already know, and I've decided that their elementary, junior high, and high school divisions are all in close vicinity of each other. (I think in canon, there was also a university section but I may be confusing the dramas with manga canon.)
They, specifically the junior high and senior high divisions, share a couple of facilities - most notably, the arts and sports sections, but their schedules are obviously not the same. I imagine these common grounds falling somewhere in between the two, meaning one would be able to reach the other division by crossing over through these areas that they share. The elementary division, on the other hand, is a bit more secluded due to their vastly different needs, though they still do occupy the same grounds - just a bit further of a trek is all.
The classes:
In terms of classes, I also see the senior high division being a bit more competitive, yet flexible in regards to certain classes the students take - specifically the ones that are outside of the core year subjects like math, science, history and such. It's supposed to be an extremely prestigious private school filled with children from all the richest in Japan. So, going along that vein, I've turned foreign language into one of those classes where you'd be able to test for a higher level if your capabilities allow it. This is why Nao was placed in the same English class as Isao, along with a mix of other 2nd and 3rd years despite being only a 1st year.
I'm unbelievable nervous about "starting up" Pictures on the Wall again after so many years of letting it sit - not idly, mind you, as I had continued to work on it behind the scenes. It was my first fic after all. I honestly don't know how much interest there will be for the story - or how much of it would be left from old readers. But I will try to write as much and as long as I can - and hope for the best.
That said, I've decided to go ahead and begin re-posting revisions for the story. More than anything, this is to prevent me from editing the revisions any further. It was my original intention to get at least half the story revised before I begin posting, but I'm beginning to realize that I'll never stop fiddling with them if I don't put it out for the public - and I've been fiddling for years. Yes, years. And the versions only got worse, not better. Enough is enough, me thinks. ._.
.
Regarding the revisions:
If, by any chance, an old reader is still around, I'd like to clarify a few things about the revisions. The storyline is still the same. What has changed in the revision will fall in the beginning chapters more than anywhere else - specifically the first 5 chapters (I'm approximating here).
The important parts are still the same, but what I've done is move some scenes around and inserted a couple new ones to expand the initial interactions between Nao and Isao/F4 a little - sometimes for the purpose of speeding things up, other times to further build their characters and relationships or make things a bit more interesting.
For example, instead of having them first meet during English class in chapter 2, I've moved it over to the first chapter and also added an extra scene where they actually encountered each other in the beginning under false impressions. The first few chapters will be the ones most prone to having these additions/edits done. Everything afterwards should remain largely the same.
The further it goes, the less revisions there will be. It was always the beginning few chapters that bothered me and not so much the ones the comes after the story truly takes off - so I reckon those, I'd probably keep the editing to a minimum, if at all.
.
Other than the grounds, the café, the hallways and various classrooms, Kamio-sensei had never really gone into much detail regarding what Eitoku's curriculum or campus is like (not that I know of anyway), so I've taken liberties to play around a little and hopefully still stay within reason in terms of Japanese school systems.
The campus:
So… Eitoku's campus, the way I've pictured it, goes something like this. It's an escalator school, as we already know, and I've decided that their elementary, junior high, and high school divisions are all in close vicinity of each other. (I think in canon, there was also a university section but I may be confusing the dramas with manga canon.)
They, specifically the junior high and senior high divisions, share a couple of facilities - most notably, the arts and sports sections, but their schedules are obviously not the same. I imagine these common grounds falling somewhere in between the two, meaning one would be able to reach the other division by crossing over through these areas that they share. The elementary division, on the other hand, is a bit more secluded due to their vastly different needs, though they still do occupy the same grounds - just a bit further of a trek is all.
The classes:
In terms of classes, I also see the senior high division being a bit more competitive, yet flexible in regards to certain classes the students take - specifically the ones that are outside of the core year subjects like math, science, history and such. It's supposed to be an extremely prestigious private school filled with children from all the richest in Japan. So, going along that vein, I've turned foreign language into one of those classes where you'd be able to test for a higher level if your capabilities allow it. This is why Nao was placed in the same English class as Isao, along with a mix of other 2nd and 3rd years despite being only a 1st year.
As I update with more chapters, I'll probably include more notes on various details - because I'm a geek like that. ;p
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I'm unbelievable nervous about "starting up" Pictures on the Wall again after so many years of letting it sit - not idly, mind you, as I had continued to work on it behind the scenes. It was my first fic after all. I honestly don't know how much interest there will be for the story - or how much of it would be left from old readers. But I will try to write as much and as long as I can - and hope for the best.